The implications of Hawkes’s The story of the stone to translation theorists

Many translation critics have commented on The Story of the Stone, David Hawkes's translation of the Chinese classical novel 《红楼梦》 written by Cao Xueqin two centuries ago. Some of these comments are favourable. For instance, Jin Di and Nida (1984: 95-98) and Jin Di (1989: 7) cite passages from it as examples to illustrate functional equivalence or the artistry of translating, and Lin Yiliang (1976: 118-119) remarks that Hawkes has, within permissible limits, made additions and embellishments here and there, 'which are necessitated solely by the differences in style and usage between Chinese and English, and not the result of an irresistible itch to revise the original and make it even better.'
But it would be interesting if we compare a passage from Hawkes's version with the original and see whether he has gone beyond the permissibe limits of translation in making these additions and embellishments.